Death and Betrayal Ft Ninjah Red

[Pakaveli]

[shadow=red,left,300][glow=Red,2,300]Ninjah Red[/glow][/shadow]
The fluids of toxic toads lace my arrows
shooting harshly, foe’s chased by sorrows
2 eyes’ gripped close as the music rolls
time to unfold the NiNjah mystic scrolls
Suppose I acted on every ferocious impulse…
…I’d probably of slew at-least 110 folks
2 kicks to the guts just for telling them jokes
Make mental notes… I’m provoked with ease
intent’s spoke clean & still I wrote this sleaze
Riding hot winds which carry me over destiny
siding not with this mockery of a monarchy
A subjective state… in this garden of hate
life’s earnings can turn into burdens & aches
The vessel of my soul seems a cauldron of waste
brainwaves polluted by the sermons of snakes
Foul nervous-tension is most certain to break…
bones of the betrayed as they turn in their graves

[glow=red,2,300][shadow=red,left,300]Pakaveli[/shadow][/glow]
Backstabbed by enemies caused by felonies
Dramatic betonies, sinful causes of ebonies
I watch afar, yet the swatch of the nunchak bar
Seeps the blood of felonious stored in my car
Do not provoke the soul’s demons that’ll invoke
Vehemence that breeds bespoke bile as anti-dote
101 dead cadavers annihilated by mournful misery
Mystery of death environs the psyche so saddened
Yet yews of yachts row up the wilful that maddened
Astrologer I am, therefore the stars teach astronomy
Monotony of brethren ruins the economy of society
Clarity is a fantasy that runs the mind of many men
In the hollowed den lie the carcasses of the bloody ten
Your messenger maligns the monstrous monarchy
Yet the truth is told though the truth states such larky
A game of minds ensue and I will pass the verdict due
No clue the dew on the sky shows that death shall ensue

[Bloodz4life]

Suppose I acted on every ferocious impulse…
…I’d probably of slew at-least 110 folks
2 kicks to the guts just for telling them jokes
Make mental notes… I’m provoked with ease
intent’s spoke clean & still I wrote this sleaze

fav part from Red

Astrologer I am, therefore the stars teach astronomy
Monotony of brethren ruins the economy of society
Clarity is a fantasy that runs the mind of many men
In the hollowed den lie the carcasses of the bloody ten

fav from pak

dope shit here i`ll come back and explain my feed better

[Pakaveli]

Aight, preciate the swift feed though

[Tek-Nik]

Nice OM Pak .... All Good Concepts And A Lot Of It I Felt ... Both Verses Were Dope And Gave Me A Good Visual Of The Topic .... All From Structure And Flow

[Pakaveli]

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[The Witness.]

thanks for following the rules.

I'll leave feed soon.it will be nominated for HOF

[Pakaveli]

well rules are rules....no exceptions lol....preciate the nom though

[doobie]

Ok let me start from the begining

I felt Ninjah Red drop more, he's drop was almost like back in medevil time
talking about arrows and toxic darts and shit, with one or 2 'jokes' lines lol
Ending his drop really well made everything a great reader.

Ok Pakaveli I found your's ok you had some nice lines and yours flowed well
It looked like you were starting to loose track of the topic, and you went from
parking you car too then ruins, smh you know where I comming from.

Anyway over all these we both good drops as I said i felt Ninjah Red a bit more
but you wernt done by, since you both had great flow and nice multis with allot
of great characteristic wordplay... keep it up peeps props and pz

[Pakaveli]

Hmmm preciate the comments

[Pakaveli]

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